Urgent! What do you think of this as a start to my story. ?
I’m 14 and write for fun. The story is aimed mainly at female teenagers and young adults. It’s a romantic drama I guess. I’m specifically interested in whether you would read the whole story, any improvements I can make etc. Thanks in advance!
If you had told me of the destiny that was soon to bloom in the beautiful mess that was my life, perhaps I would have laughed. Perhaps I wouldn’t have believed you. But most probably I would have desperately clung to your words, hoping for some sort of serenity, hoping for a happy ending. This is my teenage fairytale, unbelievably flawed yet unbelievably beautiful.
I sat quietly in the corner of my room; the incense I bought wafted a delightful fragrance through my room. Slow breath in, slow breath out. Meditation; one of my only escapes from the harsh realities of life in South Clearview, of life itself. The ringing of my old alarm clock abruptly interrupted my tranquility. Time for the gym. I quickly pulled on a black ac/dc singlet and small black shorts. I pulled my hair into a ponytail. Avoided all mirrors at every cost. I knew very well the trouble one glance could cause.
Out the door I went. I quickly jumped on my bike and peddled down the alleys of South- Clearview. Darkness was emerging quickly although my watch only read 5:00pm. South Clearview was the rust spot on a beautiful corvette, the thorn on the most dazzling rose, but it was where my run-down home was grounded. Though the town was old and dirty it was character building unlike Central Clearview. It was a miniature Beverly Hills. It was where the rich, powerful and beautiful lived, with their sprawling, manicured lawns, glimmering pools and lives seen through rose-coloured lenses.
After ten minutes of riding I entered Central Clearview. Long winding paths, lined with sweet smelling flowers and weeping willows emerged from the dark, eerie alleyways lined with families housed in cardboard boxes and dumpsters. The wailing of police sirens and screams of beaten children were replaced with the chirping of bell-birds and the laughter of happy family facades. I had to admit the atmosphere of Central Clearview had the amazing power of melting away my stresses but at the same time the unfortunate ability to sicken and disgust me.
Soon I arrived at Vigor Gym and found my friend Cynthia Thompson awaiting me. Cynthia was a smoldering beauty, with an athletic figure, captivating jet black, almond shaped eyes, luscious lashes and full lips, she was half Cherokee, and had inherited beautiful, dark skin. Her silky black hair was cut stylishly around her shoulders and her quick wit and guard was constantly up. She wore tight black bike pants and an Ed Hardy designer tee. She was a Central Clearview resident, but you’d never guess it. She was down to earth and un-interested in the idealistic, competitive lifestyles that was almost mandatory with the ownership of an enormous English Tudor style home like hers
I have to admit that this is not the type of thing I’m into.
But I must say that for what you are going for, it it working very, very well. The point of view is very well established and your introduction brings us right into the character’s life.
The great thing you did is to give us a promise in the opening paragraph. The problem is that the promise has to pay off. The introduction is strong. Now it’s time for the rest of the story.
I’m interested to find out what happens.
What are the best clippers for cutting and fading up hair?
And also where can i buy them and what other things would i need to fade hair?
Wahl are the best cutters out. They sell them at Wall Mart
What happens when you get a hair cut too short that your soo embarrased about?
A long time ago when I was living my life in korea I had super long hair and loved it. But the story changed…my life turned upside down. I was rich in korea living with my mom but now live in canada with my dad and brother.
They said that I wasnt ready to have long hair because at that point I didn’t know how to wash my hair good enough that it stinked almost every 2 days.
So they cut my hair and I looked like aI was a boy which was really embarrassing…
So long time ago that kept happening.
anyone else had this problem because I was sooo embarrassed…thank goodness i have long hair now…
: )
Just tell me if this ever happened to U.
thank u
kind of…because i cut my hair..and i was dissappointed cause i thought..i looked bad..until everybody started telling me that i didn’t looked bad..then i realized that maybe short hair isn’t so bad=)
Help, I need to cut my girlfriend’s hair?
I have limited hairdressing skills and my girlfriend wants to go super short. She has nice long shiny hair liek you see on some of the commercials, but she wants a short and slick style now with a buzzed back. She wants to go to the high school dance with me like this in a red dress and matching red gloves. She told me that she wants to look like Christy Turlington in an issue of Vogue with finger waves what is to be her short gelled hair. I tried to find some cutting instructions and supplies online, but coul only find the equipment. I even suggested that she leave her hair as it is or just go to a salon, but she thinks it would be sexy if i cut it when we’re both naked before taking a shower together. Please, someone help me out?
P.S. Can any body suggest to me how I can do this style or where I can find instructional resources on performing such a haircut. I really need help because my girlfriend is counting on me despite the fact that I love her long hair so much. E-mail me.
It would be nice if she were to donate her hair to "Locks of Love". She would be quite a hero. But to do this and be sure they get the maximum hair, she really should go to a salon, explain the cut she wants and that shes donating her hair. She will get a professional job for a good cause.
For your suggestion, you may be able to just sit back and support her while scoring points for the good idea.
What’s your opinion of this as a start to my story?
I’m 14 and write for fun. The story is aimed mainly at female teenagers and young adults. It’s a romantic drama I guess. I’m specifically interested in whether you would read the whole story, any improvements I can make etc. Thanks in advance!
If you had told me of the destiny that was soon to bloom in the beautiful mess that was my life, perhaps I would have laughed. Perhaps I wouldn’t have believed you. But most probably I would have desperately clung to your words, hoping for some sort of serenity, hoping for a happy ending. This is my teenage fairytale, unbelievably flawed yet unbelievably beautiful.
I sat quietly in the corner of my room; the incense I bought wafted a delightful fragrance through my room. Slow breath in, slow breath out. Meditation; one of my only escapes from the harsh realities of life in South Clearview, of life itself. The ringing of my old alarm clock abruptly interrupted my tranquility. Time for the gym. I quickly pulled on a black ac/dc singlet and small black shorts. I pulled my hair into a ponytail. Avoided all mirrors at every cost. I knew very well the trouble one glance could cause.
Out the door I went. I quickly jumped on my bike and peddled down the alleys of South- Clearview. Darkness was emerging quickly although my watch only read 5:00pm. South Clearview was the rust spot on a beautiful corvette, the thorn on the most dazzling rose, but it was where my run-down home was grounded. Though the town was old and dirty it was character building unlike Central Clearview. It was a miniature Beverly Hills. It was where the rich, powerful and beautiful lived, with their sprawling, manicured lawns, glimmering pools and lives seen through rose-coloured lenses.
After ten minutes of riding I entered Central Clearview. Long winding paths, lined with sweet smelling flowers and weeping willows emerged from the dark, eerie alleyways lined with families housed in cardboard boxes and dumpsters. The wailing of police sirens and screams of beaten children were replaced with the chirping of bell-birds and the laughter of happy family facades. I had to admit the atmosphere of Central Clearview had the amazing power of melting away my stresses but at the same time the unfortunate ability to sicken and disgust me.
Soon I arrived at Vigor Gym and found my friend Cynthia Thompson awaiting me. Cynthia was a smoldering beauty, with an athletic figure, captivating jet black, almond shaped eyes, luscious lashes and full lips, she was half Cherokee, and had inherited beautiful, dark skin. Her silky black hair was cut stylishly around her shoulders and her quick wit and guard was constantly up. She wore tight black bike pants and an Ed Hardy designer tee. She was a Central Clearview resident, but you’d never guess it. She was down to earth and un-interested in the idealistic, competitive lifestyles that was almost mandatory with the ownership of an enormous English Tudor style home like hers.
You are very talented. Honestly, you should consider publishing yourself.
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What attachment to use on hair clippers to cut my hair?
am a guy n my hair is about 2.5 inches long, its thin n i have big forehead, but i want short hair
umm try scissors or a razer. the kind u use for layering.
or get a proffesional to do it.
How should I cut my hair? Story follows..?
So I work in retail with my boyfriend, he is in backstock and I’m in sales. Recently we hired a really hot tall girl- and she’s got the EXACT haircut i was going to get! It’s a really short 20’s bob with bangs, but soft and feathery and feminine.
I’m not worried in the least about my boyfriend and her, and I actually really like her and we’ll probably end up being friends-
But i’m going to get my hair cut in FIVE HOURS and I need a new idea because I don’t think I want to do it right after she gets hired- it would just be weird.
please help!
p.s. i have an oval face, and really dark/thin/straight hair.
try http://www.hairstyles.com or haircuts.com or http://www.homebeautytips.com


